A peom I wrote

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A peom I wrote

Post  Elete on Tue Mar 12, 2013 6:37 pm

Hi guys this is a poem I just wrote its a rough draft it is supposed to be sad. I hope you guys like it! and thank alimiila for getting me back into poems.

He walks alone with mind full of misery
As he thinks life is sure a mystery
First his father now his mother
Why must they die one after another?
Haven’t he had enough sorrow?
He has enough pain which he can barely swallow
Life is delicate as it can be
But he learned it the hard way with misery


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Fantastique!

Post  alimiila on Tue Mar 12, 2013 7:53 pm

Wow that's really good! You should write more! xD I love the rhyming, it works really well Smile 10/10! (and I'm a tough marker xD)

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